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What has become of our unity,
my future obscured.
I pray for a change
I've been too long without.

how can you say
"its under controll"
with an empty can here
you needed "1 more"......

Explain to me,
why you lost controll
and how your family
became an expendable asset.

I was sure I needed
someone, who's footsteps
would help mould my own.
But you, I will not follow.

though perhaps im wrong?
for 16 years, Ive survived.
an inner fire that never dies,
it keeps us all burning.


In the very least
I can say I knew you.
There are some
who dont have the luxury.

F47H3R, 3XPL4IN........
well this is another poem that I havent done a rough draft of, but i feel like wrighting something so, here goes
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pleasantlyinsane Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2005
ooh nicely written. -nods-
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TarneshedHeat Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2005
thank you :ninjaeat:
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Winterfang Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
l337. Good god. *shakes head* But other than that, very nice.
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TarneshedHeat Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2005
i had reason behind doing that, just i ever have to show someone realted to me that, i dont to have to explain to them that its about my father, and quite a few kids know l337, so it kinda just worked
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Winterfang Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
Well, it did have a nice effect...I'm just opposed to l337.
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TarneshedHeat Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2005
lol, i can c:P
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artsychic27 Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2005
Good job Jake. i really like ur use ot l337 at the end!! lol ;) impressive! lol :P
Very nice
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TarneshedHeat Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2005
lol thank you
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