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What has become of our unity,
my future obscured.
I pray for a change
I've been too long without.

how can you say
"its under controll"
with an empty can here
you needed "1 more"......

Explain to me,
why you lost controll
and how your family
became an expendable asset.

I was sure I needed
someone, who's footsteps
would help mould my own.
But you, I will not follow.

though perhaps im wrong?
for 16 years, Ive survived.
an inner fire that never dies,
it keeps us all burning.


In the very least
I can say I knew you.
There are some
who dont have the luxury.

F47H3R, 3XPL4IN........
well this is another poem that I havent done a rough draft of, but i feel like wrighting something so, here goes
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:iconpleasantlyinsane:
ooh nicely written. -nods-
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Winterfang Jul 17, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
l337. Good god. *shakes head* But other than that, very nice.
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:icontarneshedheat:
i had reason behind doing that, just i ever have to show someone realted to me that, i dont to have to explain to them that its about my father, and quite a few kids know l337, so it kinda just worked
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Winterfang Jul 17, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
Well, it did have a nice effect...I'm just opposed to l337.
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:iconartsychic27:
Good job Jake. i really like ur use ot l337 at the end!! lol ;) impressive! lol :P
Very nice
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